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Post by Kaiki Chenji on Jan 5, 2006 4:33:45 GMT
Wow, tis my first time posting a poem on a site that isn't entirely comprised of friends (you know the kind, they never actually criticize). But don't you guys be too nice!
Alright, this poem is actually about people (despite what it seems to be about). Each stanza is a stereotype. My focus for this poem was flow, using the same accent pattern and such. Try saying it out loud, it sounds pretty nice (in my opinion).
As I have not decided on a title, I'll jump right it...
swiftly moving current never ever ceasing blindly charging forward always always flowing
softly blowing breezes never ever ending blindly seaching vainly always always drifting
brightly burning embers never ever fading blindly being faithful always always burning
calmly standing mountains never ever moving blindly trusting fortune always always waiting
crisply booming thunder never ever calming blindly giving orders always always roaring
thickly growing forest never ever pausing blindly swelling outward always always learning
slowly falling snowflake never ever rising blindly seeing failure always always dropping
gently streaming moonlight never ever wounding blindly feeling sorrow always always caring
blithely shining sunshine never ever changing blindly acting cheerful always always smiling
ever blooming spirit never ever dying blindly blessing friendship always always there
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Dante Rose Black
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Goodnight love I'll see you when my eyes open
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Post by Dante Rose Black on Jan 6, 2006 1:44:00 GMT
I like it good job on that a bit sketchy on the flow but other wise real good
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