Orca
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Post by Orca on Jul 19, 2004 16:07:44 GMT
Hey...I know I seem like the last person who would write some poem....but....I was at Denny's with my family...a.k.a. in hell....and I was thinking about this site and I remembered what the lovely Okami had titled his thread. "Shades of Gray." So this poem is based on that....heh...the real thing is written on crayon on a torn napkin...completely illegible, too...
A shade of gray unlike any other, you stand out from among the murmurs of the crowd. Diseased wings strive to fly, but fail to even leave the ground. But isn't she pretty, When she falls? Find a way to heal the wounds inflicted on your broken ego. Reached out to help you, but your shade of gray was far too bright for me. Don't look at me as if I know nothing of trust. For I know far more about broken promises, broken hearts, broken wings. Save me if you're willing to never look back again. But you hesitate, and I know you're already gone. Far too bright for me. As my wings fade to black, I cease to cry and fake a smile.
....so..how'd ya like it? pleeeeeeez tell me!
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Autumn
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Post by Autumn on Jul 19, 2004 19:45:01 GMT
It was very good! *nods*
Nice job, Orca.
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Orca
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Post by Orca on Jul 20, 2004 1:04:22 GMT
yay! someone replied! sankyuu! *glomps her*
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Pilantheion
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Post by Pilantheion on Jul 20, 2004 2:20:24 GMT
" I must say that i am impressed" *wry smle*
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Orca
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Post by Orca on Jul 20, 2004 2:21:32 GMT
Yay! Another! *drops Autumn and hugs Lanty* Thanks alot!
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Celebrian Isilra
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Post by Celebrian Isilra on Jul 20, 2004 3:06:01 GMT
wow, that is very good I like to. Its fun to read poems ;D
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Ribbon Valedrawn
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Post by Ribbon Valedrawn on Jul 20, 2004 4:12:27 GMT
::claps::
okay so you don't know me but i was browsing and stumbled over your poem.
its wonderful!! yeah pretty!!
okay away i go.
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Bella
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Post by Bella on Jul 20, 2004 9:36:49 GMT
It is beautiful Orca
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Kaiser
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Post by Kaiser on Jul 20, 2004 11:38:30 GMT
Orca...my GOD. *is completely awestruck* I never...NEVER...would have expected something so deep out of you! *claps* I AM VERY IMPRESSED.
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Orca
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Post by Orca on Jul 20, 2004 16:08:52 GMT
Thank you...thank you all...*bows* Kaiser! *hugs Kaiser too...though i'm already hugging Lanty...but oh well...*
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Autumn
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Post by Autumn on Jul 20, 2004 21:21:15 GMT
You are welcome Orca.
*claps as he bows*
Very good job!
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Rivika Moonstone
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Post by Rivika Moonstone on Jul 20, 2004 21:23:28 GMT
*is too lazy to get on her other account* XD Great job Orca!!!...even though I said that, teehee!! *claps also when he bows*
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Okami
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Post by Okami on Jul 21, 2004 5:52:08 GMT
"Lovely", huh? ;D
Well, I'm glad I inspired you to write this.
Because it is very, very good. *is considerably awed at the awesomeness of this poem*
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Post by Hikalyn Sarello on Jul 21, 2004 7:42:19 GMT
lol.
And Kai, that was a two-edged compliment, wasn't it?
That was awesome, Orca.
If you write more, you'll have to show me.
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Orca
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Post by Orca on Jul 21, 2004 7:43:26 GMT
Hikalyn! *huggles her* Okami! *huggles him, too* don't worry...i will..
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