.Little.Miss.Perfect.

[Hope Daniels]

Little Miss Perfect.

She can’t let anyone be mad at her
It’ll make her cry
When she does something not up to par
Inside she dies

Slowly she’ll tear herself apart
Wonder why she said that something wrong
Complain about the mark
She is; but she isn’t strong

She's created a mask for herself
It isn’t that thick…
But allowed in is only herself
She’ll show you to a certain extent, but she’s quick

She knows how to make it okay
She pretends she rarely makes mistakes
Always, everyday
She’s only half awake

I’m tired of feeling the strive to be perfect
I don’t want that feeling of knowing I could have done better
I hate it when I mess up once and they get upset
Why couldn’t I actually be perfect?

Comments and constructive criticism would be appreciated...

[-Roan-]

I really liked this poem! Made me actually feel emotion, its really good. ^_^

[Teagan]

I think it's really good, and it reminds me of someone, too. I like the effect if you read every other line, too. I don't know if it was done like that on purpose, but it's still cool.

Criticism, eh?

"Inside she dies"- I think this sentence needs to be made to fit in with the others better. It's more present tense than futuristic tense. Like, "Inside she'll die," or something.

"She’ll show you to a certain extent, but she’s quick"- This sentence isn't very clear. "She'll show it to you a certain extent, but she's quick," or something so it's easier to understand. Right now, it seems as if she's showing you off, or something, rather than showing you herself.

[Vanity Kerr]

*is Hope*

Thank you both. ^.^ ...Wow! That's neat, I didn't realize, but now that you mention it...you can read every other line. That's neat.

Lmao, criticism is right up your alley?

Inside she'll die..yeah...that would go better since the one before it is 'It'll' ... and, I guess that one wasn't too clear either. Heh, thankyou. I hope you don't mind if I steal your editing...? ^.~

Reminds you of me? Lol. I actually made a poem that related to me...I always feel like I have to be perfect. It's awful...so writing is my therapy.

[Teagan]

You can steal my editing. It's fine with me.^^

Actually, a lot of people are like this before they can finally get over it and realize the imperfections are what make us unique. Mostly, I was referring to this girl in my theatre arts. She just doesn't get it, and always is making herself look happy, but it's obviously forced. Inside, I can see that she's just really, really sad.