A little somethin I wrote...

[-Roan-]

Please dont laugh at this, I just wrote it yesterday, my first attempt at a poem in 3 months. It used to be my passion...but...yeah.... Here

Walk with me my friends
my time is almost done
Ive been fading for so long now
sinking like the sun

Talk with me my friends
reminisce of happy days
Take away my grief now
it hurts in many ways

Sit with me my friends
let me see you smile
Show no signs of sorrow now
Ive known it quite a while

Remember me my friends
When Im dead and past
We spent much time together now
So the memories will last

Mourn for me my friends
it is my time to die
You have all be so loyal
But its time to say goodbye

Keep in mind Im only 15 here, so its not like great. Um...yeah...*walks out*

[Faerlain]

I think it's quite good. I like it. Rather sad, actually...

-sniff-

Lovely. And age doesn't make any difference. ^_^

[-Roan-]

Yeah, I guess it is sad, I can never seem to write anything happy no matter how hard I try. I was a little reluctant to post it on here. And age can make a difference, but I guess not often at all. I wrote it yesterday in study hall. Mister Aylen was getting a kick out of me freaking out because I couldnt find a word to rhyme with gone, and had to change the line

And my shining moment of that hour was when I said 'some' doesnt rhyme with 'come'. It like went dead silent in my mind, and then I was so embarrassed. Aylen found it quite funny. Grrr....

[Hope Daniels]

Lol, I'm younger, I write poems...people like them. ^_~

It was awesome! I loved it, it flowed really well. Usually in poems you get a line or two that don't seem like the fit, but in yours every line worked.

It was beautiful.

[Teagan]

I'm only fourteen, but trying's always the funnest part of the journey. I think your poem sounds really honest. Kind of sad, but very honest and sincere, in my opinion.