Soft and Warm

[amy]

I wrote this poem in Civics today, and it's the complete rough draft. Comments are love.

What if I broke down and cried?
What would you do?
What would you say?
Right now, today.
If I told you how I felt,
How I dealt,
With the things I saw inside.
Would you hold me?
Scold me?
Call me names, wish I would die?
I know the answers
To my questions
I will find them when I hide.
But I want to hear you say it,
Watch your mouth as the words form.
I want to see your anger,
I want to feel your warmth.
Even if you do conform
To your reflections,
That fair complexion,
The clothes you wear,
The way you do your hair,
It bugs me, bothersome
That you think that's who you are.
Your views are far
From what I saw
That cool October night,
When we opened our souls to each other.
Now and forever, I will remember,
How your hands felt;
Soft and warm.

[Teagan]

I think it should flow together a bit more. It's still better than mine, though. XP

[Ondrea]

That is awesome, I love it =)

[Xailyn Rose]

It's very good, it seems like it should be a song though... The way you did the rhyming scheme and such. I like it a lot. ^_^