Makira Blackthorne
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Post by Makira Blackthorne on Oct 8, 2005 8:20:47 GMT
Nothing I Can Do
Nothing I Can Do To Make It Just Go Away My Life and Reality All held togther yet Slipping Away By one Dying String I need you now Anyone Could you be my Savior In Disguise? I need someone Now Who understands Me Who I am What I'm going through Where do I belong. . . ? In your arms Being held tightly Lovingly With your warmth and care and love Filling in the cold, dark blanks Or am I to be Cast aside? In my time of need As No-one Nothing Worthless Hopeless Nothing I Can Do For Us For Me For You . . .
. . .Here I Fade, into Nothingness, consumed the Dark Abyss. . .
. . .Or will you catch me as I fall into Depression and Fear. . . ? [/b][/center][/font]
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Mina
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I can hear a melody in your voice, can you hear the beat in my heart?
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Post by Mina on Oct 8, 2005 9:51:51 GMT
*Applaudes* Wow, I really like this Makira, even the way it's layed out. Really nicely written, I'm glad you shared it. ~ Mina
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Post by Teagan on Oct 8, 2005 13:39:24 GMT
Yes. It's good Makira.
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†Faith Winters†
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Post by †Faith Winters† on Oct 8, 2005 14:35:02 GMT
Wow... I really liked it ^.^ It was very good -claps-
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Makira Blackthorne
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Post by Makira Blackthorne on Oct 9, 2005 16:30:05 GMT
Thanks, guys. I don't think much of it - it's the first poem I've ever written, and I wrote it out of pure emotional stress. I'll elaborate when the time comes.... >< (And it's kind of aimed towards som'ne, if you couldn't tell... >.>)
*sniffs* *wipes eyes*
~*.Makira Blackthorne (Lori)
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Post by amy on Oct 9, 2005 18:45:50 GMT
Very pretty, Maki. I like that I can relate to it easily, with recent events in my own life. Well written and well layed out. Good job, hun.
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Hope Daniels
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.rainbow in disguise.
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Post by Hope Daniels on Oct 9, 2005 19:19:33 GMT
Beautiful. I love how you wrote it, the style. Very, very good. ;D
-Gives hug-
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